อยากถามเรื่องเรียงความอังกฤษค่ะ

ช่วยแนะนำเรืองแกรมม่าด้วยค่ะ คือเราทำไม่ได้เลย       Mobile phones are becoming the technology used all over the world. People used to communicate to parents and friends. When everyone is playing phone can not stop playing it. Nowadays, it has become something that everyone must carry at all times. Phone has become our daily lives.
�������� Moreover The phone also has the advantage It can connect to the Internet Social networks play a replacement computer. It's easy to carry when traveling. It can be informed quickly it's music, video, gaming, and also ask them for help. Communicate with people all over the world is most comfortable.
������� The phone also has a downside as well. Make money to recharge the phone. It does not concentrate in school. Alone, ignoring the external environment. It is dangerous to talk to strangers. Play phone should sleep for a time. And have no time to worry about too many phones mg or break time being.
���������  Generally There are both advantages and disadvantages for the phone. Some may be used in a way that was. Should learn how to use them and how to use it to his advantage. However, we should take time to correct. Sometimes it may help us to enjoy the society on the small screen. It may make us forget about the disaster to hurt us. And adverse effects on health as we know it.